The Last Heroes chapter 0 by Dekuopa

This game was added to the Sandpit for the following reason: Too short

This game is too short to be put into a category. Players expect games not to be all over within a few seconds.
First chapter of a long story
Review by TTPeriod
19 Jul 2015
This is an okay story for me, but I got some suggestions.

There is some capitalisation errors, and when someone speaks, you usually start a new paragraph, I think? Otherwise, you'll be fine. I also want to point out a spelling error-- this is how you spell unconsciousness.

I don't get the story fully yet, be sure to make the challenge/problem clear.


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Dekuopa

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Added 09 Jul 2015

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