It was pretty good. The point at which you slipped into I was a bit weird, as was the fact that there were two police officers at my front door, but according to the story there was only one. It was extremely sad, but I suppose that's no reason to hate a game. Nice work!
This has some nice touches. I enjoyed the highlighted words in the descriptions providing that extra level of guidance. There were some errors (e.g. you slipped into "I" at one point instead of "you"), and after the police station, the text was loonnggg. I tried out the various endings (I found three), and the Mustang question caught me by surprise, as I used to actually own a yellow Mustang... Overall, a pleasant experience and straightforward, if a bit light.