Zombie High Sequel part one by Kyle Cleghorn

Review by Odie_da_Bossé

This game is really drifting between the 3-4 star rating. A really well distributed plot. And are you an artist? If you drew all the title pages of your games, your an amazing artist!

There are many reasons why this isn't such a good game. Firstly, the grammar was poor, and this is important for games. I doubt you are under 10, as you got some writing tricks and crucial ways to write correct, such as making a new paragraph between each dialogue. But another downfall to your game was that the amount of writing was poorly distributed. Only about 4 sentences at the very max should be written before a link should be there.

The reason I set this back to a three star rating is because of the way you distributed your links. It was very smart putting the link 'continue' when there was more to read, but you just put 'continue' over and over again, and if you do that, the reader will start to skim the writing, and not know what is going on. So really, there were only about 2 or 3 real choices I chose before I died, but another 4 choices were just 'continue'.

This game really has potential if you clean some of these writing errors, but well done, none the less. Happy game making!

Review by 660677

Amazing, cant wait for next one.