A story about a crybaby...........*shrugs* Eh.
Going for a disturb factor requires background, atmosphere, detail, and forming connections between the readers and characters (and those are only a few among several other elements needed). This had none of these. It was just really gross.
I love this story, it's really well put together. I especially had fun reading the hilarious narration. From beginning to end I was finding it more difficult to stifle a laugh, (was trying to avoid waking my beloved arch nemesis lying here beside me), while questioning "what the hell just happened?" None the less ot was amazing. Nice work!
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