It is very short. There's not a lot of options because you die in almost every way. I agree with @syxxity, it is a good idea and it does have amazing spelling, it doesn't seem real to me. Teachers do not carry guns in school, nor do they shoot you for dancing around.
First. It is SUPER SHORT. It is very boring and secondly there's not a lot of detail. The words are very hard to see. I recommend you redo this.
Its okay for my part. The grammar is good. It is kind of similar to the Lynx game I am working on, which is one of my originals. The only thing I would wish was a few pictures to describe the environment around 'me'.. Or at least a description of what the territory looks like. Feel free to grab some ideas from other stories including mine, just as long as its not as similar as them. As far as I read the description of this game, it is almost a little bit familiar to my game(s) I've been working on for the past 5 months. I don't mind it at all, I think I can learn more ideas from you. So far it is a good game.
Um. First of all, this game makes no sense kinda. Like how do you faint after you've taken a swim, just met with a tom cat, etc. ?? Confusing on what this is exactly. I recommend you fix these details to make a lot more sense. It is very short so I wouldn't recommend this to people who hate confusion and short games. This doesnt really fit with the warrior cats at all, even if I havent read it. It does not make sense nor does it fit in properly with romance. Do a better job next time.
It's a bit short, but Im assuming theres going to be a Part 4.. Btw my game of part 1 is done lol. Anyway, it's a grate game :)
Cash me ousside. How bout dat?
It was great btw
super short, I didn't really like how it started off as darkfeather liking "you". I would like to get to know who he is, in case others haven't read warrior cats.
Um. Okay, nice.. Like the pug thing.. and the music, music is great. Is this just about pug talking about china?
I LOVE this game! It tells me about everything I need to know before I start the actual game, you have a very detailed description, and I hope u finish it. (no rush)
Whut dis boi below is talkin about a squiffy form dont pay any attention to her ⬇︎
The game is really good! I have a massive WIP myself, although it's for school I think I got carried away.. Anyway it's a great game, I just kinda wanted like an option in one of the kits play where you could either play with others or do something independent. Just a suggestion..
It's good for a 5th grade student! Just some spelling and grammar errors. Also, since this is a squiffy, you could also do the gamebook quest (simple mode) that way the users playing your game can restart to find out the other endings too!.. Furthermore, when you put,
**"???kit, Flamekit and Ashkit please step forward, from this day on until you earn your warrior name you will be know as ???paw, Flamepaw and Ashpaw. ???paw your mentor will be me,..."**
Just as a tip, You don't have to do it: For the passage I pasted above, just to let you know that you could type in blanks: ___kit/paw.
Anyway, I know I typed a lot, it's a great game. Tell me when it's finished :)
more of a history of how BP started.
Every ending I've played has the same one. "Your dreams were crushed" I liked it so far, but the endings were annoying because some of them we're the same.
Yeah i get that its the lyrics. You can add the audio too btw...
It's a cool game, I love your drawings too! Tell me when its finished uwu.
It's a weird game, I like it so far. It's kind of like a puzzle! Right now I'm in the part of the pizza parlor :)
This is amazing! Could u review mine?
its a WIP.
Its good. I wish it had options bc right now its like a story.
This. This is G R E A T N E S S
Also I have a spouse???? oowoo
Hi. Cool game, I'll tell my bsf about ur games. Again..
THE DEFINITION OF F U N
For the first time, I liked it. Btw sorry for not listening to you, I just now noticed the thing on the annihilation sim. Forgive meh :(
oOwOo its too shortttt make moreeeeeeee
[Insert happy face here] I liked it. :)
Short, but this may be the nicest one out of all ur games.
5 + 5 = 10 is an equation (which may or may not be true, depending on what you clicked).
5 - 4 = 9 is also an equation (which may or may not be true, depending on what you clicked).
TIPS: Try to use quest gamebook/text adventure. It helps more often with these types of simulators.. Please don't make it like one of my boring math classes. Make it funny, cool, and not boring.
1. It's uncomplete. 2. It's short. 3. The button won't even start. 4. SUPER BORING.
Please fix your game to make it better.
its a work in progress but i like it.
Its short and the game keeps going and going until you get extremely bored and reload the stupid game. N u h u h, n o w a y
extremely boring after awhile. ur just uploading videos about gaming and vlogs. Also youtubers do much more than work and make videos. They have FUN. and you don't have that.
AAAAAAAAA, This is so sad!!!! Bestie how could youuu. All ur games are great but mine's gonna be even better that urs! Altho it's short. Still like it doh
It's short. It's like a puzzle. Kinda like it :)
Short. I'd like to know the backstory
Its the same game from ur other one. Whats the point of even making a second one???
Why did u even make the game? Its super short.
This is a bit like Girl meets world where Riley and Maya meet and do their crazy things together, I like it. I'll give it a 4 star. Idk if you were inspired or even seen the show but its a good show, I've watched it when I was little.
I don't like how the first part is you HAVE to be a officer, when there is two suggestions and its in your description. I had to take a star off that, secondly could you add a little more sentences cus it gets short and boring. It's kind of pointless to click something over and over again after you've failed..
Honestly, I thought this would be like one of the shrek movies, but it's not. It's literally short, going on a stupid adventure with a dude named Mr. Owl..
DUUUUUUUUUDE I love all ur games, theyre so fun.! I could tell ur game was inspired by DetectiveLand uwu. It's a cool game, even tho ur prob discontinuing it bc of school:
I 👏 WANT 👏 MORE👏
I agree with my friend, @Here's a Problem, becausse the second passage is unreadable, it's superrrr short.
I've been waiting for a bit then I realized its from 2017 and now know that'll never finish. RIP
This is a cool game, fren.
Incomplete, Short, Needs a bit paragraphs instead of just 2 sentences. Not even sentences its like a brief introduction of what "brian" did next.
Short and Incomplete. Had to put a 1 for that.
It's okay but it needs to be more interactive, I would like to have more options to name the kits and try to fight off enemies and such.
it just says coming soon and a list of depression stuff???
Its a good game but instead of those LONG paragraphs, maybe press enter 2x after 7 sentences, my eyes hurt.
My wifi wa super slow since I was in a new house, but for the game it’s AMAZING! I loved it, It seemed like it was already over but i cant wait to see more of this. Lmk when its finished 💛