Dead Hyper by Daz Revan

First draft of my first Gamebook (Short chapter) and also new to any form of writing. Any advice would be appreciated.

Set on the planet Krios in the year 2123. Your Kade Haven, a police officer in the Sol System Alliance. After an incident with a Zorrack prisoner you wake to find the police station abandoned. Your job is to get out alive.


Alien art work will be added on a later date.