That was good in a very very very sad way I even cried a little.
The thing that's the most sad about this is that it actually happens in real life. Not the dreams maybe but the other stuff
I have only one thing to say
I'm bad at following directions
WHAT THE CRAP
IT WAS FRICKIN AMAZIN
I'm sorry but please also do fix the slight grammar errors.
Don't mind me I'm always a stickler with spelling and grammer
The absolute perfect way to do a modern life Romeo and Juliet!!! That could not have been done better!! :-)
The lols though just the frikin lols
It was really good the only way to make it better is word a bit better and make a bit longer but, all in all it's pretty good.
It was fine grammar wise and the story itself was very good but, again there were no choices for the reader so that's a down side. But all in all it was pretty good.
It's pretty good it just needs some work. Like I chose one thing and it lead right back to the same choice.