It's good for a 5th grade student! Just some spelling and grammar errors. Also, since this is a squiffy, you could also do the gamebook quest (simple mode) that way the users playing your game can restart to find out the other endings too!.. Furthermore, when you put,
**"???kit, Flamekit and Ashkit please step forward, from this day on until you earn your warrior name you will be know as ???paw, Flamepaw and Ashpaw. ???paw your mentor will be me,..."**
Just as a tip, You don't have to do it: For the passage I pasted above, just to let you know that you could type in blanks: ___kit/paw.
Anyway, I know I typed a lot, it's a great game. Tell me when it's finished :)