Obey Me! The Rewrite by aceofcolours

Comment IrinaButChill

Plesssss more chapters it's very great

Comment PlesiosaurLiska

THIS is actually what i needed my whole life. Thank you so much for your work, it is very decent. Can't wait for the next update !

Comment Slash pass

I'm having a problem it only happens with this one it keeps pulling up a debug menu and I don't know how to get rid of it

Review orbblubber

good, but i somehow oped a debug menu, and cant get rid of it

Comment QuisquilianParadise

Hello, my name is Quix. Otherwise known as your second five star review? So first some bugs, grammar things, and a little bit constructive criticism. Hopefully this useful and not like, presumptuous. This is just what I do when I playtest other interactive stories but that's on a different interactive fiction website. You are of course free to take or leave any of my more subjective suggestions.

Bugs and Grammar (warning I can be extremely nitpicky, I'm told it's annoying by some but I'm a writer myself and I'm also told I'm a pretty good editor by my writer friends):

- "Well, you're boutta witness that for real" -> "bouta"
- “I said me too. My only loves are animated as well, because real people just aren't it ,” - > “I said me too. My only loves are animated as well, because real people just aren't it,”
- “Huuuuuh?! Y-you…you know about 0?!” Levi looks like the ground beneath him has cracked. What's 0? It's been like that that in all my games. I assume something's just missing. It might be a bit difficult, but maybe you could in pronouns for the character? Or just use "they", or "that" ("You know about that?!")
- “Yeah, I know it sounds weird, but you’ve got no idea how much he depends on that thing. Let’s see, what did he call it again? “My one true love” or something? It was like he thought it was a real person. He probably named it. I bet he even slept with it! Gross." -> It should be 'my one true', since the rest of it is already in quotes.
- Your eyes widen at his words - no one’s allowed to talk about him? -> Shouldn't it be "Your eyes widen at his words. No one's allowed to talk about him? (italics)"
- “Fine, sorry.. But onto more important matters: You’re sure that Lucifer said frozen, right?” -> three dots in the ellipsis
“Anyway, I have to say that I’m surprised,” Asmo says, turning to you. “You have quit a clever brain, Yuna ! -> Yuna! (no

Review QuisquilianParadise

I've actually thought about doing a rewrite myself in an interactive format before so this is an amazing coincidence! I accidentally found this while reading random Obey Me! fan fiction. I enjoy the headcanons, mostly. More traditional fanfiction is a bit hard to enjoy when it's of an interactive medium with a largely undefined protagonist. Anyway, I LOVED your "telling the brothers they're your favorite" scenario especially so I got curious enough to follow the link and see what someone else had done with the idea.

It's lovely. It captures the original tone and characters well, while providing a new depth. Which is of course what you're going for but it still shocked me what a delight it was to play. I did notice a few bugs and grammar errors, but I'll leave those in the comments.

Review Everest Storm

i love it, cant wait for the next update. keep up the good work!