Warrior Cats Text Adventure (part 1) by Flamestriker6

Review by WolfWarrior

I think it was pretty good but it was a bit short in my opinion. I agree with Willowdapple that Mistspirit/Splashdawn should be apart of a prophecy or something because it dosn't make sense that the cat from wc who was trying to kill Mistspirit/splashdawn in the battle would come to Thunder clan camp to finish him/her off unless Mistspirit/slpashdawn.

Review by Willowdapple

Not bad for your first text adventure! I think you should definitely make a part 2.
Good Parts: I didn't see any typos or plot holes. Also, the plot was definitely interesting. Great job!
Constructive Criticism: It was very short, no denying that. Maybe you should make this one longer instead of adding a part 2.
Advice: Similar to the Constructive Criticism, I think you should just make this one longer: like 4 parts in 1. Otherwise, it's very hard to find the other parts, and most people wouldn't play them all and prefer to play it right here. So my advice would be to update it. Alright, here's my final piece of advice. It will take your game quite a long time to get categorized (since this website is kind of falling apart) But I know a moderator directly who can categorize your game. His name is ZanMag. Just write him an email with the link to your game asking to categorize it for you.
Suggestions: Maybe in the next part, Windclan will keep trying to kill Mistspirit/ Splashdawn (like Brokenstar) and drag all the other clans into the mix. Why? Maybe because they say Mistspirit/Splashdawn can't ever be a warrior because he lost his/her memory and he/she's just eating prey all day. But maybe Mistspirit/Splashdawn's accident was on purpose, because he/she is part of a prophecy.

Alright, enough babbling. To conclude... keep writing, I want to see what happens next. Have a great day!