also for your art make the creature somewhat shorter and let it have a much shorter neck. Separate the tail from the bum + back then make it slightly longer by the tip. If your tail gets too thin, widen the middle.
Good story so far. Maybe make it so we try to find our way back home. Also, does that Jeff The Killer picture have to be there? I could barely concentrate with it staring at me. "Go to sleep." Yeah, right. That's not gonna happen fella...