I want to start off by saying this is a delightful start. The writing is good enough, the scenario is intriguing and the story has potential. The problem is that this is no where near done. Many choices do not work, and often the story ends because the path hasn't been given options yet. I know this is a work in progress, so I'm going to give it a 3 star rating. With a little polishing and some bits filled out, this story can become amazing.
I see good things in the future of this story. I'm waiting anxiously for when it's finished.
