It's alright a few grammar errors but yeah it reminds me of another game called alter ego.
Grammar: 3/5 a few mistakes here and there and some missing words in sentences.
Story line: 3/5 I felt like I was jumping from place to place. One second I am in a school fighting bullies the next I am traveling in time or whatever but you don't get to experience it really before it pushes you off to the next part of the story where you graduate. It could be good just needs some improvement. It is really creative but maybe a little too unrealistic for the category it's in.
Ending: 4/5 I liked the ending but still could use help.