Flawless by nekoandpie

Review DWaM

There are quite a few issues in regards to grammar and sentence structure, which really hurt the experience for me personally. I understand what you were going for, but the impact wasn't as strong as it could've been. The "insults" felt quite bare because at no point did the machine really know who I was nor did he get a chance to, so it never managed to cut deep. At best it felt like a typical "reason you suck speech" (minus the impact, I suppose). And once you put all of that aside, all you're left with is the machine's (or perhaps the creator's) "revelation". I never really felt like it explained its philosophy fully and it just came off as basic nihilism.

In any case, could've been a lot more.

Review sergeikat

well done. enjoyable!