afternoon melody by davidbreyes

Review by Ninjagorulz

Love the aesthetic! It's very unique and was easy on the eyes to read. The go back button is certainly nice, it makes it easier to play through and see the endings while not having to restart every time! The "put your hands up and take a few steps back" option leads to a page with the picture being larger than the rest, you may want to fix that. The art you had included is very well made!

Alongside that, I'd suggest making your passages a little bit longer. I'd also suggest some proofreading since there are some spots where the grammar appears to struggle. "ask ragu he it needs help" is one of those spots, and should likely be changed to something like "ask ragu if he needs help".

With a little extra time and a few fixings here and there, you could very well make a wonderful short game! You obviously have style, and it makes the game very desirable to play! Keep up the good work, and I hope that you're able to update this so that I can give an even higher rating!

-Ninjagorulz