I feel like the grammatical errors (like the lack of commas) detract from the story, and in my opinion, the plotline is just alright. Gameplay wise, I like the professional feel that I haven't seen in some of the other games on this site. The characterization is also good. Hoping for the next chapter, looking forward to see what happens with the skills and attributes.
Awesome. Please finish this. I would like to see more dialogue options. Like when Draygun and others are talking I'd like to have that reflect how the story goes or how characters perceive me. But seriously cool.