Dragon Age: Redemption by -XYAB-

Review by The Crock

Another rubbish game. Grammar is awful too.

Review by SivD1

I enjoyed this story more than your Breaking Bad one. It was a decent length, and had many characters, and the dialogue and writing seemed faithful to the source material. Also, I didn't find many grammar mistakes, so that's a plus.

The downside come to the story and interactivity of the adventure. The story was... rushed, to say the least. Also, I think that you might have wanted to have more interactivity (for example, when you choose who to kill, have us do things to actually get the guy), and possibly split the story in smaller chunks of paragraphs (which you did use this time).

All in all, I think that this is a step up from your previous work, and continue to encourage you along your way.