Prosper by Magic Orange

Comment Magic Orange

Another update incoming! Since it's been over a year since the last update to the game, I'll be posting the next chunk as soon as I reach the stopping point in all the paths so far. Hopefully that will be up soon. I'll probably continue this trend, as releasing this thing as a completed game will take so long that any previous interest in it will be gone (Which I'm hoping hasn't happened already). The game hits its first major diversion, and the plot begins to pick up as well, in this next part, so you can look forward to that.

Comment Magic Orange

I feel like you're all owed a progress update by now. Work has been slower than I would have liked, due to some things going on in my personal life, but I expect to have much more time to write now. So far, I'm about 1/4 of the way through my plans, however I'm just reaching some of the very dense parts of the story that will take a while to write. The first major plot division also just happened, and there are more to come later as well, so that will take some more time. But, as I said, I will have more time to work now, so hopefully it will go quickly. Thanks for reading and for playing the game!

Comment kittywheaty

I love the game so far only thing I think needs improving is the descriptions. The descriptions of the places are not bad i just can't imagine the place well. Like the part when they fell into the secret base. The only thing i could imagine was a white room made of metal with a table and chairs. I couldn't imagine it well. An example is: When I first entered the room the first thing I noticed was the walls. It was covered from top to bottom with posters(even the ceiling). Every single one of them were popular music artists or actors. Everything screamed fan girl. The sheets, pillows, and pillow cases on the bed were all (famous music artist) themed. Even the lamp was. (name) desk was filled with pens, pencils, notebooks, folders, anything that you could think of that a famous person would be on. To make it even worse everything was pink. And when I say everything I meant it. The plush pink carpet was the same shade as the walls, chairs, desk, even the curtains on the window were pink. As I stared in disbelief (name) pushed past me and sat down on her bed like nothing was wrong. I sat there gaping like a fish out of water for a few minutes until I finally said something. "Jesus christ....."
Your story is not bad its great. I'm only suggesting that you add more details so that the readers could imagine themselves there watching everything unfold. I can't wait until you post the rest :D