My Sister, The Slime Girl by HannibalKing

Review by erana

Waay too short (exactly ONE scene) to be called INTERACTIVE fiction

Review by Taron

Playing a slime girl (or any "monster gril") is pretty rare, be it in games or in interactive stories. I'm glad to have found this. :)

Review by MSochist

black text on a white background got my jacuzzi jets moving...downstairs...

Review by Geiya

I absolutely loved this. I found it to be well written, but I do have a couple tripes. While the choices made were interesting, there weren’t very many alternative path, or any at all, I believe. Every choice led to the same outcome, but I suppose that’s alright if it’s going to be multiple chapters. I do also have a nitpicky point about the use of quotation, in a couple words like when you put them around “omit,” it didn’t make much sense, as she wasn’t doing some pseudo omition of those parts by like, covering them up- she literally omitted them, as they were no longer on her form. But again- just a nitpick.
Also, are we to assume chapter 2 will never come? If so I have a question, but I won’t ask it unless I know you see this first.

Review by Blunderbutt69

I WANT CHAPTER 2 IN MY REACH... NOW!!!

Review by that girl

• I got really confused about who was talking during the breakfast scene… Maybe it'd help if Alexandra(?)'s spoken lines were coloured blue, and a different colour was used for each character in a conversation?
• I actually was pleased with the various options when there was multiple choice. My only pet peeve in the routes is that when there was no choice, it didn't saw 'next page', 'next', 'continue', or some such, but rather had an 'option', as if I missed something that would allow alternate paths, but never told me how to get it. However, it's a tiny annoyance at best.
• Hoping they release Chapter 2. I only reached one ending so far (only did a single playthrough so far), which isn't something many I know would enjoy - though I certainly do - but if multiple endings are present, a sequel to any of them would be great.
• Was surprised that Alexandra(?) wasn't a hermaphrodite, so a few options were closed off for future story developments, without implimenting a minor retroactive continuity.

Well worth the read for those interested.

Review by This Big Hush

This is good. The basic idea is weird, and not something that I had come across before, but it worked well and was well written, plus there was some substance to it. The downside was the lack of choices. Looking forward to part 2.

Review by glutenwhip

This is excellent! You've done a great job. I have to confess, the scenario had me pretty bewildered at first, but you wrote in a way that helped clearly explain what was going on and I ended up enjoying it a lot. It was a very interesting play that left me curious for more!