Very poorly written. Much of the text makes no sense. The "story" wasn't good at all. This is definitely not something I would recommend to anyone.
From the age of the main character, I'm guessing the writer is in 6th grade. With that in mind, it shows a little promise, but the writer needs to know that not everything he writes is worthy of seeing the light of day. When the writer gets a little older, he will look back at this and cringe.
