Would You Survive by tokiy

Comment Kamaton999

Okay this is clearly your first try so I'm not going to rate anything. But I will say this...

The perspective idea is neat, but very confusing as well. So I suggest you either stick with one playable character or find a better way to explain which character the reader is supposed to play as.

And last but not least setting the mood and setting still needs some work. I won't get into that because I'm sure you already know what "mood" and "Setting" is.

Now don't let me discourage you or your idea's I'm just offering some constructive criticism okay? No hard feelings right?

Okay...thats all and good luck with your future adventures :) (Sorry for making it so long)