Satan666
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Reviews by Satan666
Review for game of size V 1.0.4
08 May 2020
Don't let the star rating get you down, I'm just being honest.
The bones of a giantess story are there, yet it's missing the basic foundation of a textadventure.
Conventions:
Grammar, spelling, and overall presentation could use a LOT of work, as it's hard to extrapolate much meaningful story from the few paragraphs you have.
Storytelling:
There's not much of a story to be told, but it wouldn't hurt to give an introduction. Moreover, it's a shame that most objects you can see do not have proper descriptions. It would also go a long way to improve the death scenes to be more detailed, so as to keep the reader occupied, however cleaning up the grammar should be your first and foremost goal.
Gameplay:
It's hard to navigate through the world since the environment does not seem to be crafted in a conventional way, and thus your only way of getting around is the UP, DOWN, IN, OUT, and sometimes the compass is used. This makes it mostly a shot in the dark, and you don't have many choices to make, despite showing many differnet objects your character could potentially explore. There are also sections where you can get trapped, with no choice but to restart.
I'm only really writing a review for this because it seems the creator reads them, and perhaps could learn from this, because I'd like to see more textadventures suceed, esspecially in this genre.
Keep working at it, friend.
The bones of a giantess story are there, yet it's missing the basic foundation of a textadventure.
Conventions:
Grammar, spelling, and overall presentation could use a LOT of work, as it's hard to extrapolate much meaningful story from the few paragraphs you have.
Storytelling:
There's not much of a story to be told, but it wouldn't hurt to give an introduction. Moreover, it's a shame that most objects you can see do not have proper descriptions. It would also go a long way to improve the death scenes to be more detailed, so as to keep the reader occupied, however cleaning up the grammar should be your first and foremost goal.
Gameplay:
It's hard to navigate through the world since the environment does not seem to be crafted in a conventional way, and thus your only way of getting around is the UP, DOWN, IN, OUT, and sometimes the compass is used. This makes it mostly a shot in the dark, and you don't have many choices to make, despite showing many differnet objects your character could potentially explore. There are also sections where you can get trapped, with no choice but to restart.
I'm only really writing a review for this because it seems the creator reads them, and perhaps could learn from this, because I'd like to see more textadventures suceed, esspecially in this genre.
Keep working at it, friend.
Review for Lemon Simulator 2014
21 Feb 2020
"Do you know who I am? I'm the man who's going to burn your house down! With the lemons! I'm going to get my engineers to invent a combustible lemon that burns your house down!"
- Cave Johnsen, 1982
- Cave Johnsen, 1982
Review for School Giantess
18 Oct 2018
This game is decent, but it is absolutely FULL of spelling and grammar mistakes. Are you a non-native speaker, or... just young? (I hope you aren't TOO young...) Regardless of your excuse, the writing is hard to read for a English nerd like me.
Thankfully, you are in luck!
Just take all the written dialogue and text, and paste it into Grammarly. It's a spellchecker that will make sure your writing is much better, or at least get rid of the MANY spelling and grammar mistakes.
If you don't wanna use Grammarly, that's fine, but you NEED to fix the spelling errors ASAP or this game will suffer greatly. As a Textadventure, it should be your number one priority, in my opinion. You could also do well with a bit better pacing, and dialogue, but based on the current state of the writing, I think you should take it slow.
Here is the link to the Grammarly website. It's a FREE chrome extension, and it's amazing!
https://www.grammarly.com/?q=brand&utm_source=google&utm_medium=cpc&utm_campaign=brand_f1&utm_content=76996511046&utm_term=grammarly&matchtype=e&placement=&network=g&gclid=EAIaIQobChMI0oH574qR3gIVFsDICh35MANcEAAYASAAEgLvcfD_BwE
Thankfully, you are in luck!
Just take all the written dialogue and text, and paste it into Grammarly. It's a spellchecker that will make sure your writing is much better, or at least get rid of the MANY spelling and grammar mistakes.
If you don't wanna use Grammarly, that's fine, but you NEED to fix the spelling errors ASAP or this game will suffer greatly. As a Textadventure, it should be your number one priority, in my opinion. You could also do well with a bit better pacing, and dialogue, but based on the current state of the writing, I think you should take it slow.
Here is the link to the Grammarly website. It's a FREE chrome extension, and it's amazing!
https://www.grammarly.com/?q=brand&utm_source=google&utm_medium=cpc&utm_campaign=brand_f1&utm_content=76996511046&utm_term=grammarly&matchtype=e&placement=&network=g&gclid=EAIaIQobChMI0oH574qR3gIVFsDICh35MANcEAAYASAAEgLvcfD_BwE