Maybe you shouldn't make it so that it represents the character as 'I'. It makes the universe dry and you don't explore their personalities. They're just... Them. You can't choose if you like Dunekit because they tell you beforehand. You can't choose to say that Beekit isn't spunky and rad, because they tell you that beforehand. You should make it so you can explore their personalities, not for it to just be given toward you.
I don't give a FRICK about Darkfeather. But oh no, you HAVE TO be mates with him. Atleast make multiple toms to be with, y'know! There's no other way to go than 'be mates with darkfeather' and it makes the game really shallow and mediocre. It's also not interesting at all. I'm sorry, but this game needs to just be restarted completely. It's like a fake cake; It looks nice, but when you bite into it it's horrible.
You can hardly control your character. It seems your a god and you can make one cat mean or nice. Then you can change the settings into a new scene.
It isn't friendly to the player, and you get led into things that you don't want. Like for instance, I decided to be mean, and then Hawkfrost told me how much he loved me, and then wanted to be my mate. I wouldn't like someone who liked mean people. They're weird. But oh no, since you were mean you MUST be his mate.
It's much too short. A good text adventure takes place inside a dimension where there is no canon cats, and the clans never end, and always come back after disasters. There is fan-made or the real clans in these, each of them are appealing although. Then the player is welcomed to a new world, unknown to what to come.
It hits on them that a guy/gal is appealing after awhile, which builds relationships. Meanwhile, this just makes people go like 'I'd love to have _______ as a mate! I'm gonna play this and try being his mate!' Boring, right?
So if you make another dimension, people are much more interested in taking some time into the cats, and slowly crack open the egg of their personality. Meanwhile in this, you know them, and also you can't control who you want to be your mate anyway! So the whole concept of 'Dating' is stupid!
This is by far the worst Warriors dating simulator I've seen so far. It's not appealing to others to see the same characters, same personalities, etc. It's uncontrollable and short too.
A short story with hardly any grammar. If you were going to make something like this make a game book; You just make branches of dialog and things, its the same as this but easier to make and understand. Half the time I was thinking that the good choices were too obvious. I'm surprised this isn't in the sandpit to be honest; its so short and the game is boring because you can't completely control yourself; sometimes your led into things and do or say things you don't want to do. It tells you nothing about your kit life; and you discover it one the way; but I didn't like it because most of the time I was confused with my mother's personality and other backstory about me. This isn't that great of a text adventure.
