The Walk v1.0 by Cody Robinson

Review Quid-Ad-Mendacium

I liked it. The choices I made did not reveal any major spelling mistakes, or at least, none that I noticed, so that is all good. The story seemed a little underdeveloped and it was fairly short. The length isn't too much of an issue, but the story part is, seeing as it is a game about stories, essentially. So if that was improved the rating would go up. Honestly it just needs a bit of context, something to make me fall into the story and feel the danger, rather than just reading it.

Review Fabled Man

I enjoyed this, and am giving it a 3 out of 5. It could easily be a 4 with some revision, and by expanding on the story could very well reach a perfect 5 rating.

Here are some observations:

You seem more in your element when you were describing the more sinister scenes. The opening entries seem thin compared to what comes afterwards, but I suspect you were thinking readers would just want to get on with it, which isn't a surprising thought in this day and age. However if that is the case then I have to disagree. You should celebrate your writing, don't shorten it out of concern some people may not have an attention span. Put your writing out there and make people read. Don't dumb anything down.

I would stay away from ending death scenes with jabs and barbs, such as 'What did you think would happen?' Let your death scenes be enjoyable and make the reader smile and wonder what he or she should do differently, rather than admonishing them for doing something that is a part of the game. Often readers will want to choose a certain action even though they know it may lead to death, just to see what awaits them. Let them enjoy that, it's why you put it in there so don't lessen its impact.

There was a small typo when you go back to get your jacket: 'By the time YOUR reach the pathway entrance'.

There were a couple of scenes that felt abstract just to be abstract, but you had a good number of scenes that felt just right. There is a real mindscrew moment in the penultimate scene that I won't mention so as not to spoil things for anyone reading this. It worked very well and is a big payoff.

The ending was abrupt and could certainly be drawn out or put across cleaner, and as you mention the whole gamebook is short, but I think there is a lot to go on here and it could easily be expanded and made even better. I particularly think the sinkhole scene has a lot of potential and should be given more of a chance to shine.

Overall a great job, especially considering it wa

Review youth44

I love it! :D

Comment youth44

Hey, it's me again. I still haven't beat it, but there's some kind of glitch I get every now and then. I click on one of the choices and then it says Error, can't click on Right Forklift or something like that. It makes me have to start over. If you could find out how to fix that I would love it. Thank You.

Comment youth44

I love "The Walk", I thought it was funny at the end because it said, "You've should of brought a jacket." That was great and fun. For your first time, that was unbelievable! I want to see a lot more of your stories. :D

Comment Cody Robinson

A few quick comments from the writer:

Thank you, Hero Robb, for playing my game. I particularly like to hear about people playing it more than once to explore all the options. And for anyone who hasn't yet played First Times, please do. It makes my creation look paltry by comparison.

Corey Everett, the game was deliberately made so that all decisions would lead the player down two paths, success or death. The illusion of choice that you speak of was intentional.

Silver, as a big fan of OCD, I thought your review was just awesome. Seriously. I appreciated being able to follow your review and see what parts of the gamebook you liked and disliked.

All things considered, I welcome all reviews, positive and negative. I do intend on making more in the future. But uh, don't wait up, haha.

Thanks again, everyone.

BERT! BERRRT! (Inside joke)

Comment Mr.Motsm

I won, and I approve of your taste in music.

Review mcsoncop

Was a fun game. Personally know the author and have given input as well. There is a possibility of more to come. Plenty of ideas have been thrown around. Cody you know that you can use a little more detail, but not bad at all. Had alot of fun playing.

Review Silver

I've only played two play throughs which I feel is a reasonable amount of time to form a view. My first play through resulted in me dying for the heinous crime of not wearing a jacket which I felt was unfairly punishing. So a possible five star game went down to four stars. On my second play through I ended up in a forest and some heart-stopping writing had me chased by a mysterious force which turned out to be a tree. Things look promising and I consider giving five stars again.

I'm presented with two options. I forget the first but I remember the second, which I took, because it was called 'take the right path'. Geddit? It can't be the wring one? So I did that and had some more good writing and then got asked to click 'continue'. I did and I got a game error. Very disappointing.

My problem now is that it has gone down to three stars. But I feel it's better than all the other games that I've rated three stars. But four stars would be an almost perfect game, which this isn't. But it isn't bad enough to be three. So I'm giving it 3.5, but selecting four on the menu as it doesn't allow me to select half measures and the writing was good.

Review alora

fun but... creepy. make more! PLZ!!!!

Review Hero Robb

I have to say that this game reminded me of the movie Dark Floors. It's awesome, has awesome abstract horror, has an awesome part that implies some sort of unnatural time travel was going on, and I had no clue what the hell was going on from beginning to end. It may be short, but I replayed it even after I won to see if any of the deaths gave more information about what was going on. It deserves more than 100 plays. *mental high five*
My only complaint - Creed? Really? lol just kidding. But not really. Maybe.

Review Corey Everett

This was rather nice game, with great spelling and grammar (Excuse mine, I have a bad keyboard) , and somewhat terrified me. Now, I do have some complaints. It basically gave the illusion of choice, with only one real ending. It could've been longer. Now, do not mistake my observations for dissapointment, as I was pretty pleased by the gamebook. I would've rated a five except for the above reasons. Uh, bye.