The kidnapping by The_Great_Unknown

In the bustling city of San Francisco. Young Theo a bright seven-year-old was taken from the safety of his home and the comfort of his family. Can you save Theo from the horrors that await him or suffer the feeling of guilt knowing you could've stopped it.

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Thank you for the film crew of Rush Hour for inspiring me to make this game and thanks to GabrielTheGreat, my friends and my sister for editing my writing.

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Comment The_Great_Unknown

15 Mar 2024

Dear, Girthy Pickle

Could you provide an example of a paragraph that was unclear so that I know what to fix. Again thank you for taking to time to review my game so that I can improve it

Sincerely,
TheGreatUnkownYlime

Comment The_Great_Unknown

15 Mar 2024

Dear, Girthy Pickle

Thank you for your review and your honesty. I am deeply sorry for not being clear enough and repeating words, I will work hard to fix these issues. Thank you for taking the time to review and play my game.

Sincerely,
TheGreatUnknownYlime

Review Girthy Pickle

13 Mar 2024

The kidnapping has a promising start and presents an intriguing story idea. The narrative is rich in detail, particularly in sentence structure and punctuation. However, there are areas for improvement, such as avoiding repetition of words and ensuring clarity from the beginning. While exploring both options, the storyline lacked coherence initially, making it challenging to follow. For future iterations, it's advisable to minimize repetition and enhance clarity by providing additional context within the options and paragraphs. Overall, it's an engaging game with room for improvement.

Review Harry Potter Hippogrif

12 Mar 2024

Really fun, very much recommended. Love the whole idea!