I liked it a lot even though it was rushed. I like the name redfur but the name does make me a little sad because I think of redtail if you knw who im talking about. I like the opening picture and I like to look at all of the warrior cat projects that are new and encourage those new authors :) Nice tory and Im glad I was abled to catch that bird and the fact that you made waterstar sound like we were in riverclan or something.
I think it has the potential to be fantastic and I can help you if you want it. I also have a story that I would like for you to read and rate but anyways all most new writers start out this way, with a basic short story but you will get there. The only reason my story is decently long is because I get carried away when I am typing which is why my reviews and messages are fairly long when I do.
I think this story has the potential to be Fantastic If you worked on it a little more. I am always up for helping you and good luck. When you give out a really good story you will feel really good aout yoursef :) Also I said this in the comments but I loved how you used my warrior cat RP name fernstar when I do roblox
I love what you did to the story and I love how much detail you put in it! Could you give me some tips so I can make mine better. My link is in the comment box. Overall I loved it and hope that you can make more.
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