The_Lion's_Den

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Reviews by The_Lion's_Den

28 Nov 2019
Such a great game! I've played three different times and got three totally different endings! Well done!
(5)

Review for A wolf's life
27 Nov 2019
This is so good!
(5)

Review for Warrior Cat RPG
27 Nov 2019
It's a really good game! Can't wait to play the finished product!
(5)

Review for Warrior Cats
27 Nov 2019
It's a pretty good game, I would just like to suggest somethings.
1. Make more different and unique endings. The only real endings are to be with Darkfeather or die.
2. If the character is going to die, you should make it more realistic. In one end you are surprised by a badger and killed. Yet why would this badger kill you if you were able to fight two badgers near the nursery? In the next ending, you are with Darkfeather and he asks you to be his mate. If you say no, he leaves and you drown. There is no way a wave big enough to sweep a full-grown cat away would develop THAT quickly.
3. You also fail to follow the Chekhov's Gun principle and while not necessary, it helps your story to follow it. If you don't know, Chekhov's Gun means if something(like a gun) Is introduced into the plot, that thing has to be used in some way. (like said gun getting used in the next chapter).. You make it seem like Gingerpelt and Rainspeckle are going to be a problem by having Violetflame feel dread with them being there. Then, these two are never heard from again. You set up a problem with no payoff.
4. After the celebrate with your clan option, the paragraphs get really short. The paragraphs sound better when they are longer.

Overall an ok game, and you don't have to listen to any of this. I'm just trying to help.
(4)

27 Nov 2019
This is the best warriors interactive game I've ever seen. There is so much you're able to do. Good job Nutjitzu!
(5)

Review for Warrior Cats CYOA
27 Nov 2019
This is really good and has a lot of detail!
(5)


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