It's OK, but I don't think people like reading thousand character paragraphs, and with many grammatical errors. The paragraphs should be MUCH shorter, and the dog breed, weapon selection, ect. don't affect much. In time loop games, the player must feel in control for them to work, but in this game, I don't feel in control AT ALL, probably because there is only ONE ENDING. I know this is your first game, but it still is bad.