Snow station by SummerWolf

Comment Odie_da_Bossé

Nicely written SummerWolf! I will review this when it's completely finished!

You are a great writer! I enjoyed reading your short passages. But unfortunately, I kind of agree with Mauricio Diaz Garcia. You should maybe include two or three links every now and then. I understand that you are trying to make this easy to read, but maybe make links that don't quite differ the story, that way it seems there is much depth in the chapter.

Also, pictures would help! A little touches here and there will spruce up this game. And one more thing.

There are 2 ways a writer structures his stories;

1. Give the reader heaps of information, for a back story of what is going on, then slowly build up the story, and all the action and intense parts are nearing the end, then the story cools back down to an ending.

2. A big, thrilling part with action at the start, then give information on the story on the way, then more action, info, action, info... etc.

Looking forward for more Snow Station!

Comment Mauricio Diaz Garcia

Need choices. Do not link if there are no choices.

Review lukas4544

Short, small story.
I like it !
I hope you make a lot of games like this !