This is an intriguing story. My only problem is that while the characters experience a lot of action, all I can do is scroll down. Any way that the story could be broken up(for more readability), or if I could choose what Kiyoti did at some points, would be nice. High marks for the interesting characters!
This is a good story - my only criticism would be that the tense changes often from current tense to past tense, which can be confusing. Overall, I enjoyed it, and will finish reading when it's done.
