Escape from the Friendzone by Penguin316

Review by Stripes

It was alright. Nothing groundbreaking. Would've liked to see some backstory or something instead of just, "oh ya u liek dis guy hes ur crush." No offense intended, ha ha. But yeah, you can't have a good love story if the two characters don't have any connection. And you can't just state that they have connection; you have to show, don't tell. For example, explaining how the two met and developing their personalities would be nice. Adding a scene where one person defended the other from bullies or helped them when they were feeling down or something would be sweet, even if it is a bit cliche. A little attention to detail could go a long way. Also, the options are pretty limited, and the story itself is short. That's nothing a little practice can't help, though! Good luck with your future work!

Review by glutenwhip

I liked it a lot! You did a great job. I got the normal ending on my first playthrough. :}