It's an alright story, but it definitely has that WIP feel to it. I noticed you kept using the wrong your/you're and a couple other grammar mistakes, which could be fixed with a bit of studying/practice. This may be a bit of a nitpick, but the names seemed a bit boring. Prefixes/suffixes aren't limited to whatever was used in the main books, but really anything that a cat could reasonably know of- even kittypet name prefixes if you ever write about Skyclan. Otherwise, this game seems really nice, and could probably be amazing if it's ever finished.
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