amayah, i can see why you're being bullied. hopefully the bullies come back so they can stop you from uploading a game 3 seconds after you've made it <33333
tunselous is my new deity
as far as I can tell there's no way to win, but at least you put some effort into it unlike most authors
very broken and nonsensical
try again and try harder before uploading, or at least test it. I don't understand what's so hard about that
ok so, cool concept, some tips
- some object descriptions were left blank, this is bad because it makes your game seem lazy
- I liked the skype conversation bit with your friend, but afterwards the text box disappeared and after I went to breakfast the text color changed to a pale white and it was difficult to read, you might want to look into that
- In the beginning, I tried using "john" in place of "friend" as that was his name, but it didn't work. To flesh out the game a bit you may want to consider adding more names for objects, to try and account for whatever the player types. It would make sense that "john" would work instead of "friend" so you may want to add it.
I wish there would have been more because it abruptly ended for me after the breakfast, as I couldn't go anywhere and the text box was missing. All in all, a good first game, keep making them and improving :)
pro tips:
- If you're going to add objects, always put a description. The dreaded, "nothing out of the ordinary" is a sure sign of a badly made game. And "looks scary" isn't a good description for a giant mountain.
- Why were we trying to go to the tea party? Why were there zombies? Why did you attempt to create an event with zombies by putting them in the room description, thus making the player encounter them each time they entered? This doesn't make sense.
- What was the point of the old people, and the description for this game being "you will meet people, be careful with them"? As far as I could tell, the "people" were just objects that did absolutely nothing.
- When creating objects, please fix the prefixes, otherwise we get "You can see a An Spring" and it's off putting
I dunno why I made this list really, as you probably won't listen and will continue to feed the sandbox, but all in all, please at least put effort into a game before publishing it. I honestly don't see why people do this, what you expect from us?
The only thing scary about this is that you didn't even add a single object to the game before uploading
Pro tip: if it doesn't even last a second, or worse yet, if it doesn't function whatsoever, DON'T UPLOAD IT
pls thx
No substance and it looks like you spent around 10 minutes making it, but 2 stars for trying. Also, you seem to have confused room names with room descriptions, those are two entirely different things and it makes the game confusing, not only for us the players but for you in trying to create it.
Please consider finishing or maybe even adding some semblance of content to your game before publishing, the sandpit grows ever larger with each game uploaded that hasn't had any effort put into it.
Pro tip: This is a website for interactive fiction, otherwise known as textadventures. Fanfiction belongs on fanfiction.net, text based games belong here. At least make a gamebook, not just a giant paragraph with terrible grammar and then publish it.
Also, it's not really a good idea to make "parts" of your games, I've seen a lot of games that do this and it kind of clutters the categories, especially when said games are incredibly short and lack substance.
-1/10 ign
The links are broken and this game doesn't deserve more than 2 stars but I'm gonna give it 5 stars because I can
This is the highest form of comedy I have ever witnessed in my 2 years of making textadventures
This is the absolute best lemony goodness game in the world
That was a REALLY good game for your first! I love how the monster can appear in any room and rip you to pieces! Hurray! I made it to the outside of the building and I don't know how to use the car, though...
Oh GOD. I died several times and it actually felt scary for a textadventure. I was always terrified that one of them was in the next room.
I'm guessing that this "branden" is you rating your own games? Or is it a friend? Because this game REALLY does not deserve five stars, jeez. So, apparently I'm a sociopathic kid with a knife killing random creatures. How does that make any sense?
You're getting better, but maybe try making a text adventure instead of a gamebook? These are KINDA boring, you know. My games are boring too, but they make no sense, so I guess you can expect that.
This is just sad. It tries to direct you to a game site and is unfinished. You should make an actually good game for once.
I have not beaten this, but so much work has been put into it, and it is amazing. Best game I've seen in FOREVER.
AND EVER.
Good! It was very funny, and kinda frustrating. But it was still awesome!
It was too short, but I liked it. By the way, Steve was a leaf.
LOL
This is just the kind of game that I like to make.
This is a super cute and easy game i found on here. It is pretty short but still really good someone else should play it.
Great! I saw nothing wrong with it except you spelled medical wrong. But I don't really care, so good job!
Hurray for rabid squirrels!
BEST. GAME. EVAR.
It has just my kind of random humor. Great job and stuff. I made a no-sense game too, but I'm afraid to release it because it's so easy to die and people will rate it bad for that reason. So therefore, I am hiding it. But this is the best game i've ever played. Nothing was really capitalized and it was pretty short, but I simply refuse to rate it less. You get the banana award for this game.
Hurray for youuuu
Why?
There are no good descriptions and there's only two rooms. Why?! And after I go to the living room I am unable to move or see anything. Did I suddenly lose my ability to walk and become blind? What happened?
What do you do?
I went inside the barrel of the gun somehow it was fun
What is this madness? The only puzzle...IS...GOING EAST! HOW HARD! I NEVER WOULD HAVE FIGURED IT OUT IF I HADN'T HAD ANY SENSE.
It was okay, but short. And random. I like randomness. But it was too short for me and there really wasn't a story to it and you should make more endings, please. And more options. That is all I have to say.
I didn't like the language in it, but other than that, killing things as a unicorn is amazing. I applaud you, author of this game, for making a game that truly makes almost no sense but just enough for everyone not to hate it.
You are in a room.
You can see a miners.
> look at miners
Nothing out of the ordinary.
> take miners
You can't take it.
> Look at miners
Nothing out of the ordinary.
> talk to miners
It says nothing.
> ask miners about mining
It does not reply.
Hm. How strange.
I liked it, and I didn't find any bugs.
Nice game! I soon realized that there is no way to win, since everything just gets worse and worse the more you play.
What? WHAT?!
Even though I have no idea what happened, since the Leader of Terror appeared and swore at me (at least, I think he did), then sent me in the future for some reason... I'm pretty sure this was a joke. And the points thing at the end made no sense either. I'm a pretty no-sense kind of person, so this kind of made me laugh. But you're still getting one star for putting no effort into it. Too bad.
