Really fantastic. Reminded me of the mindset behind "Diary of an Oxygen Thief". A story based around emotion and reactions between the characters that felt moving and strangely relatable. I genuinely enjoyed the experience, though I can see why it might not have been for everyone. While many criticized the work for its "fall in grammar", I felt as though that was a part of the production itself-it's poetry in its simplest form, and that's what is truly remarkable. Definitely not recommended for anyone who can't handle strong imagery or thought-provoking projects, but heavily recommended for anyone who enjoys a good story.
This was absolutely amazing. It so completely encompassed all the emotions and conflicts, and it was beautifully written, bad grammar or otherwise. I loved it, and enjoyed it so much. It wasn't a choose your own adventure, and it said that at the very beginning. It all lead to the exact same ending. It is not a love story.
It isn't a choose your adventure story, it's a telling of a story. You can get more details if you want them, or just forge on, but you don't have many choices. It's darker than I was expecting, but I can't complain on that point. I can, however, complain about grammar. I mean, I won't really, because we all make mistakes, but I could.
Started out well, showing a strong grasp of the English language. However, you very quickly fell into the common pitfalls of most niche writers. Patronising and pretentious. Also, your grammar very quickly began to decline from the offset.
This is fantastic.
When I finished, I realised that it wasn't what I was searching for. A 'Choose your own adventure'-story. But it was more. 'I needed it without knowing that I need it'-kind of story.
I have to add that this is very inspiring. I'm leaving, going to write my novel, thank you very much.