It's an interesting game, though I feel like it better suits a younger audience. Felt as if I was reading a book a child would read, like around 11 or 12. If your goal is an older audience I would suggest working on your vocabulary and phrasing.
The story checks out to be one of horror. The pictures look strange, I'll give you credit on that. It just doesn't creep you out our actually deliver that "horror" factor, so the wording could use work. The narrator makes you feel like you are breaking the 4th wall, or talking with you sarcastically as if you are buddies, and that really does not convey horror in a way where you can feel it through the screen. To each their own though.
Story was cliche, but not horrible enough to give an appalling rating. The mocking tone of the narration takes away the mood of the horror, and it seems to solely rely on the images just to scare the reader.