My Sister, The Slime Girl by HannibalKing

Review erana

Waay too short (exactly ONE scene) to be called INTERACTIVE fiction

Review Taron

Playing a slime girl (or any "monster gril") is pretty rare, be it in games or in interactive stories. I'm glad to have found this. :)

Comment AveragePog

Damn, would've loved to see chapter 2 of this

Review MSochist

black text on a white background got my jacuzzi jets moving...downstairs...

Review Geiya

I absolutely loved this. I found it to be well written, but I do have a couple tripes. While the choices made were interesting, there weren’t very many alternative path, or any at all, I believe. Every choice led to the same outcome, but I suppose that’s alright if it’s going to be multiple chapters. I do also have a nitpicky point about the use of quotation, in a couple words like when you put them around “omit,” it didn’t make much sense, as she wasn’t doing some pseudo omition of those parts by like, covering them up- she literally omitted them, as they were no longer on her form. But again- just a nitpick.
Also, are we to assume chapter 2 will never come? If so I have a question, but I won’t ask it unless I know you see this first.

Comment Blunderbutt69

I think he died

Review Blunderbutt69

I WANT CHAPTER 2 IN MY REACH... NOW!!!

Review that girl

• I got really confused about who was talking during the breakfast scene… Maybe it'd help if Alexandra(?)'s spoken lines were coloured blue, and a different colour was used for each character in a conversation?
• I actually was pleased with the various options when there was multiple choice. My only pet peeve in the routes is that when there was no choice, it didn't saw 'next page', 'next', 'continue', or some such, but rather had an 'option', as if I missed something that would allow alternate paths, but never told me how to get it. However, it's a tiny annoyance at best.
• Hoping they release Chapter 2. I only reached one ending so far (only did a single playthrough so far), which isn't something many I know would enjoy - though I certainly do - but if multiple endings are present, a sequel to any of them would be great.
• Was surprised that Alexandra(?) wasn't a hermaphrodite, so a few options were closed off for future story developments, without implimenting a minor retroactive continuity.

Well worth the read for those interested.

Comment Padrinos

Interesting story but the details and quality were there. Great job. Only suggestion is to maybe add some bold or italic font to emphasize places and break up the look just a bit. I use italics for my characters voice. Just a suggestion, but keep writing and working.

Review This Big Hush

This is good. The basic idea is weird, and not something that I had come across before, but it worked well and was well written, plus there was some substance to it. The downside was the lack of choices. Looking forward to part 2.

Comment AnonyPuss

A bizarre story, but very well written (but not much in the way choices).

Comment ExcaliburPrime

Great game I can't wait for chapter 2

Comment deavrm02

How do i play it keeps just sending me to a page that only has the word restart in blue?

Review glutenwhip

This is excellent! You've done a great job. I have to confess, the scenario had me pretty bewildered at first, but you wrote in a way that helped clearly explain what was going on and I ended up enjoying it a lot. It was a very interesting play that left me curious for more!

Comment HannibalKing

Thank you for the suggestion! I checked out their games today and they were very up my alley. Excellent recommendation!

Comment PrayForExtinction

I think you would enjoy Fenoxo's Trials in Tainted Space.